She’s Rattled

Writing with the Sunday Whirl this morning.  The words are bare, birds, crescendo, rattle, shatter, teeth, honey, blue, gravity, edges, blood, electrify.  I used them all.  I hope I’ve not forgotten how to post in WordPress.  It has been a long time.


She’s Rattled

her bare teeth draw blood
the wounds blue at the edges

the taste is honey
electrified by the moment

the crescendo of bird’s song
shatters the silence of dawn

rattled, she allows
gravity to close the lid.



About Sabra Bowers

Poet / Blogger / Writer
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20 Responses to She’s Rattled

  1. annell4 says:

    I did enjoy your write and how you pared it down, nothing extra…and “she allowed gravity to close the lid.”

  2. danielb59 says:


  3. Renee says:

    So happy that Ms. Slater is back in town!

  4. It’s so good to see you writing, Sabra!,I love the tension you’ve created in this piece. That honey taste electrified by the moment…yet it rattles her enough to let it go. Beautiful writing.

  5. Very concise! It wasn’t an easy set of words to work with, either.

  6. colonialist says:

    This one goes straight for the jugular!

  7. I used to love to do these wordles–nice job, Sabra. The reader doesn’t even notice how you used them.

  8. I haven’t been to the Sunday Whirl for a long time. Glad to see you here, also returning and playing with these words.

  9. Imelda says:

    Lovely use of words, Sabra. I am glad to read another work of yours. 🙂

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