behind her
the first scarlet rays
struck the sky
the pair knew they didn’t
have a moment to spare
he had expected this day
and saved a bit for it
they stood in a long, loving caress
then using all their might
they walked separate ways
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Written for The Sunday Whirl. The words this week: bit, might, behind, spare, caress, sky, save, expect, pair, struck, scarlet, first.
Later, Miss Slater 
A tight and economical use of the words to create a coherent and satisfying result. I like it.
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Thank you! Certainly not my best, but I wanted to play. 🙂
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I think it’s a fine piece..purposeful..direct..and an honesty that we could do well to apply to the real world
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Thank you, Jae Rose. Very glad to see you here. I think it is better to acknowledge endings in relationships.
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It takes great courage to confront the situation and resolves to go separate ways. It puts thinking into play to create such a poem as this. Well wrapped up Sabra!
Hank
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Thank you so much for visiting and leaving me a comment, Hank. 🙂 Hope you’ll visit again.
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Yours appears to be a gentler breakup than that in my piece. A relationship can be habit forming and realization finally sinks in that it is going nowhere. Glad you did play.
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Thank you oldegg for your visit and comments. I always appreciate hearing from you. Off in a few to read yours. I like the poems you write about relationship. There is always honesty in them.
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oh how sad…and sort of sweet and hopeful as well.
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Yes, maybe they will meet again, but not in the same way as now. Appreciate your visit and comment. Thank you!!
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Beautifully unexpected…yet tender.
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Thank you, Annell. Always glad to see you here and read your comment. 🙂
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They took an unexpected turn at the end. I like it.
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Thank you, Robin. Love seeing you here. Happy Sunday to you and yours!
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such sweet sorrow!
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Yes, that is the feeling I was going for…glad you caught it. 🙂 Thank you for visiting and leaving me your thoughts.
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What’s left unsaid intrigues me.
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Very glad to see you here, Laurie. Thanks for leaving me a comment. 🙂
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It takes courage to go separate ways …
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Yes, indeed. Thanks for your visit and comment, Marianne. 🙂
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Using all their might… I understand that one. Moving on when we know it’s what is best for us, can be darn difficult.
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It can be; and often we don’t, when we should. Thank you for your visit and comment, Brenda. 🙂
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There is a whole novel here in ten lines! I love how tight this is and how crisp the images!
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Thank you, Linda. I appreciate your visit and comment.
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Unexpected twist.
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Thank you for visiting and leaving me a comment, Irene. 🙂
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Endings are also beginnings. You’ve captured that sense with your economical use of the words.
Elizabeth
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Thank you, Elizabeth. Always great to see you here.
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Sabra, this made me cry, in lieu of my husband’s health problems. It is beautifully written.
Pamela
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I am glad it touched you and I wish your husband an improvement in his health. May he be well! Thank you so much for your visit, Pamela.
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Such a spark can really light ones imagination!
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Yes! Thanks for your visit and comment, Misky. 🙂
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yes, it does take might…. hard to put your arms around it but one can definitely sit upon the mountain…. love this in every way… the softness shining through and the grit still sticks in my teeth….
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Thank you, ms pie. Thanks for your visit and poetic comment. 🙂
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