Exile

Sunday Whirl 9-22-13

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Exile

made a rash decision
to exile the three

who cradled their
secret stories

as clues piled up
like autumn apples

and peering spirits
clawed for more

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Written for The Sunday Whirl.  The words this week are claws, peering, spirits, stories, apples, secret, cradle, pile, clues, exile, three, and rash.

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About Sabra Bowers

Poet / Blogger / Writer
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26 Responses to Exile

  1. drpkp says:

    Oooh Sabra – I love the clean lines of this poem ” clues piling up ” and “peering spirits clawed for more” Quite brilliant ! 🙂

  2. Sabra Bowers says:

    Pearl, thank you! Maybe an interesting Halloween read? I appreciate your support. 🙂

  3. Tight work – cleverly done.

  4. Stan Ski says:

    Nailed it! Brilliant!

  5. I love the autumn imagery and your use of claws. Yes to the Halloween read. “As clues piled up like autumn apples” is a perfect line.

  6. annell says:

    I like the way you got to the essence!

  7. Robin Poole says:

    Love it!

  8. Sabra Bowers says:

    Thank you, Robin. Very glad you stopped by and left me a comment.

  9. Sabra Bowers says:

    Thank you, Daphne. I appreciate your visit and comment.

  10. magicalmysticalteacher says:

    I do believe I would sedulously avoid those peering spirits and their clawing…

  11. Pamela says:

    Sabra, I agree this is crisp writing, nicely done.

    Pamela

  12. kaykuala says:

    Smooth flow, short and sweet. Blends very well with the words given. Nicely Sabra!

    Hank

  13. oldegg says:

    Terse and telling.

  14. Sabra Bowers says:

    Oldegg, I delight in your comment. Terse, I haven’t heard in a while. Thanks for stopping by and leaving me a terse comment. 🙂

  15. Mark Spruill says:

    Quick, creative, contemplative. I like it!

  16. Sabra Bowers says:

    Thank you, Mark. I liked reading your whirl this week. It would have been a perfect one to share on The Sunday Whirl site. It was also perfect for your blog.

  17. 1sojournal says:

    Crisp and economical use of the words. Really like those autumn apples.

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/09/22/prelapsarian-before-that-other-old-story/

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